In writing we’re warned against using cliches. On top of that, if we use metaphors or similes, they need to reflect the point of view (pov) of our main character. Here are some examples of overused cliches guaranteed to stamp “amateur” all over your masterpiece!
- tall, dark and handsome
- leopards don’t change their spots (been guilty of using this one!)
- sleeping like the dead
- bright-eyed and bushy-tailed
I signed up for a Course on Critiquing through American Christian Fiction Writers and was given an assignment which involved rewriting certain cliches…how do you think I did?
The fog came in on little cat feet.
The fog wisped around rooftops, winding in and out like a slinking cat.
Like a thief, the moon hid behind a cloud.
The cloud-obscured moon lent a dark oppression to the night.
The bed was as soft as a cloud.
The bed’s pillow-like softness embraced her to sleep.
A junkyard dog
Her boyfriends so far had all been territorial–pit bull types chaining her to them, treating her like trash.
Want to take a stab at one of them? It’s fun!